You could certainly use a few sources to back up what you are trying to say here, even throwing in a few statistics of how many students drop out anyway or how many professors are hired by the university even though they don't have the credentials to actually teach their subject. I don't agree with your paper yet, you have way more convincing to do. I know this is more of a satirical paper but it would have more punch if it was organized like a real oped and then had the twist at the end.
I felt like your voice was very much lost in this, in order to convince your audience it helps to believe in what you are writing, make me believe that you really think this.
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